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The Legend of the Rainbow!

Long long ago in a far away land there was a magic meadow where two little girls lived.The girls' names are Quincie and Jalynn. They were sister. Quincie and Jalynn loved the magic meadow because it always was summer.The meadow really didn't have any weakness. The magic meadow had mountains all around it and it had a big lake in the middle. It also had lots of were best friends with them. There were hundreds of tall trees. There were flowers that grew everywhere. The meadow smelled like pine. You could always hear birds chirping and singing. After school everyday they would go to the animal friends were doing. They had a secret way to talk to their animal friends. Some days after school they would play hide and go seek tag. Quincie and Jalynn thought the magic meadow was perfect except for one thing every thing was green. The two girls thought if there was a way to get some color that would make the magic meadow even more prettier. Quincie and Jalynn thought about ways to get color in the magic meadow. Quincie and Jalynn did not have any idea how to make the meadow prettier. The two girls thought and thought. Then Quincie said, "How about if we go talk to the animals". So the two girls went off o see there friend the sunk. They told the sunk what there problem was. Then the sunk said " what if I spray the plants in the meadow maybe they will change colors. So he sprayed and sprayed and sprayed all over the magic meadow. The air in the meadow smelled really bad. The plants didn't work all it did is make it smell really bad. The sunk felt so bad because his idea didn't work. Quincie, Jalynn and sunk went to go talk to the painted turtle. They talked and thought. Then the painted turtle said " what if we paint all of the plants and flowers." So Quincie, Jalynn, skunk, and painted turtle all started to paint the plants and flowers. The meadow looked beautiful but the next day it rained and all the plaint came off. Quincie, Jalynn, sunk,painted turtle work was all ruined. All of them were very sad. They had no clue what to do to have so they all talked and thought. Then they heard a noise. It was the bald eagle. He asked why everyone looked so sad. They said because we are trying to get color in the magic meadow. The bald eagle thought for a minute then he said I need to talk to the sun and clouds maybe they can help. How the bald eagle talk to the clouds and sun is that the clouds knows what the eagle is saying because he can understand it. Then the clouds tell the sun.The sun and clouds listened to the eagle idea. The idea was if it rained and a rainbow came out and then the wind will blow it to the ground. Then the meadow will have some color. The sun and clouds said that that was a good idea. So it rained and rained.The next day it stopped raining and there was a big gorgeous rainbow and it was on the ground. That is how the plants and flowers in the magic meadow got color.

The End! ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

Hi Hgymnast, I understand that your story was about two girls and their names are Quincie and Jalynn. They found a rainbow and the color of the world was black and white. When they found the rainbow they could make the color of the world all diffrent colors. They fixed the color of the world. I like how you talk about the meadow becuse you told about what's there and what;s happening in your story. I was wondering how do the clouds talk to the sun? from Paul

I like the details in your story.You put a lot of effort into the legend.I want to know if the magic meadow had any weaknesses.How did you come up with the it always being Summer?If there was such a place,that would be a miracle!Maybe you should check punctuation and spelling. Summer

Hgymnast- Thank you Paul,summer,and molovesdog and everybody else for the comments!-Hgymnast

I think that summer07,mi7md,and HorsePerson1 all of them I think have changed a lot there story well.-Hgymnast P.S Good job Peeps-Hay

I like the people from Mr.Smiths class that did a good job fixing it was Paul, Emily,andGabby. Also good job to everyone eles!- Hgymnast

meyerislandchief writes: check your spelling and grammar add more adjectives & adverbs (describing words) to really bring the story visually to life for your reader.

(Final copy)! The Legend of the Rainbow!

Long long ago in a far away land there was a magic meadow where two little girls lived.The girls' names are Quincie and Jalynn. They were sister. Quincie and Jalynn loved the magic meadow because it always was summer.The meadow really didn't have any weakness. The magic meadow had mountains all around it and it had a big lake in the middle. It also had lots of were best friends with them. There were hundreds of tall trees. There were flowers that grew everywhere. The meadow smelled like pine. You could always hear birds chirping and singing. After school everyday they would go to the animal friends were doing. They had a secret way to talk to their animal friends. Some days after school they would play hide and go seek tag. Quincie and Jalynn thought the magic meadow was perfect except for one thing every thing was green. The two girls thought if there was a way to get some color that would make the magic meadow even more prettier. Quincie and Jalynn thought about ways to get color in the magic meadow. Quincie and Jalynn did not have any idea how to make the meadow prettier. The two girls thought and thought. Then Quincie said, "How about if we go talk to the animals". So the two girls went off o see there friend the sunk. They told the sunk what there problem was. Then the sunk said " what if I spray the plants in the meadow maybe they will change colors. So he sprayed and sprayed and sprayed all over the magic meadow. The air in the meadow smelled really bad. The plants didn't work all it did is make it smell really bad. The sunk felt so bad because his idea didn't work. Quincie, Jalynn and sunk went to go talk to the painted turtle. They talked and thought. Then the painted turtle said " what if we paint all of the plants and flowers." So Quincie, Jalynn, skunk, and painted turtle all started to paint the plants and flowers. The meadow looked beautiful but the next day it rained and all the plaint came off. Quincie, Jalynn, sunk,painted turtle work was all ruined. All of them were very sad. They had no clue what to do to have so they all talked and thought. Then they heard a noise. It was the bald eagle. He asked why everyone looked so sad. They said because we are trying to get color in the magic meadow. The bald eagle thought for a minute then he said I need to talk to the sun and clouds maybe they can help. How the bald eagle talk to the clouds and sun is that the clouds knows what the eagle is saying because he can understand it. Then the clouds tell the sun.The sun and clouds listened to the eagle idea. The idea was if it rained and a rainbow came out and then the wind will blow it to the ground. Then the meadow will have some color. The sun and clouds said that that was a good idea. So it rained and rained.The next day it stopped raining and there was a big gorgeous rainbow and it was on the ground. That is how the plants and flowers in the magic meadow got color.

The End! -Hgymnast

DEAR Hymnast, I heard that in your story there was a skunk.I liked your creatively things that you invented. I wondered what was the skunks name?