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The Legend of how people got paper Idioms

1.Absent without leave 2.Don't try to teach your grandma suck eggs

1.First theres a paper cow 2.Then theres trees and how they tell you they do it 3.Next theres a overcow 4.Absent without leave 5.Then I tell you to not teach your grandma to suck eggs

You thought that trees made paper? Your dead wrong. So listen up buddy boy and your going to go for the ride of your life. First the cows are born. here once was a cow named Dude, he was a paper cow, when you milked him paper came out. Then they are raised until they can fend for themselves on the street. Then they are given weapons of mass destruction. Then they are captured when they are older, then they are taken to a farm and are put to work. This part is like they are slaves, there is an overcow that watches over them. If they try to escape they go to the milking post, the cow are then put in a stable. The overcow milks them really fast and makes them get a paper cut. Some of the cows go AWOL witch means absent without leave. The cows try to go AWOL sometimes... actually alot of the time. This is about the end of the ride, so don't try to teach your grandma to suck eggs and don't tell anyone that already knows how paper is made. Cause they might not like this version, but this is the truth.

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Hello Poke-A-Doke I heard in the story if the cows try to escape the people that are waching over the cows take them to the milking post and they udder the cow fast enough and then the cow gets a paper cut. (2) I have a quetion that why do paper come from cows.(3) I understand that othe people (I'll be back later to finish.)

__I don't know why I chose paper coming from cows, I guess it was the first thing that came to my mind. Also I like milk, so maybe I thought that cows should be the center of my story. I have a question for you about my story, did you get the moral?__ _

Helow Poke A Doke. I heard THat tha cow was named Dude why did you named him like that???I also liked your idea of tha cow macing paper.I also Wonder why you menssiond that thay gave them masiv wepons in your story???


 * [Revised Story] How People Got Paper**

You thought that trees made paper? You're dead wrong. So listen up buddy boy [and or girl]. You're going to go for the ride of your life! First the cows are born. As an example, there once was a cow named Dude, he was a paper cow. When you milked him paper came out. Then the cows are raised until they can fend for themselves on the street. Next they are given a badge that makes them chaos agents. Don't fear they only use the weapons of chaos if someone makes fun of them. They are captured when they are older, then they are taken to a farm and are put to work. This part is like they are slaves except they are cows. There is an Overcow that watches over them. If they try to escape, they go to the milking post. The cows are then put in a stable. The Overcow milks them really fast and makes them get a paper cut. How does the Overcow milk the cows if he has cow hoofs you ask? Well, the Overcow has human hands, he is actually a chaos agent himself. Some of the cows go AWOL which means absent without leave. The cows try to go AWOL sometimes... actually a lot of the time. Most of the time they are never found, that's why you see cows at farms. They go to the west and they work for farmers as dairy cows. This is about the end of the ride, so don't try to teach your grandma to suck eggs. [Which means don't tell anyone that already knows how paper is made. They might not like this version, but this is the truth.] _

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Best Revisoins 1.A and W 2.Hgymnast 3.Texboy Mazzu kids 1.Gabby 2.Emily 3.AustinN meyerislandchief writes: check your spelling and grammar add more adjectives & adverbs (describing words) to really bring the story visually to life for your reader. Add dialog & then break your dialog down into smaller paragraphs with each time a new speak talks, a new paragraph starts. You have one big paragraph - break it down to make it easier to read Poke-A-Doke writes: [Final Draft] How people got paper

You thought that trees made paper? You're just plain really really wrong. So listen up buddy boy [and or girl]. You're going to go for the ride of your life,if you haven't already been to ceder point and rode wildcat. First the cows are born. As an example, there once was a cow named Dude, he was a paper cow. When you milked him paper came out. Then the cows are raised until they can fend for themselves on the street. Next they are given a badge that makes them chaos agents. Don't fear they only use the weapons of chaos if someone makes fun of them. They are captured when they are older, then they are taken to a farm and are put to work. This part is like they are slaves except they are cows. There is an Overcow that watches over them. If they try to escape, they go to the milking post. The cows are then put in a stable. The Overcow milks them really fast and makes them get a paper cut. How does the Overcow milk the cows if he has cow hoofs you ask? Well, the Overcow has human hands, he is actually a chaos agent himself. Some of the cows go AWOL which means absent without leave. The cows try to go AWOL sometimes... actually a lot of the time. Most of the time they are never found, that's why you see cows at farms. They go to the west and they work for farmers as dairy cows. This is about the end of the ride, so don't try to teach your grandma to suck eggs. [Which means don't tell anyone that already knows how paper is made. They might not like this version, but this is the truth.]