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idioms start of legend One day, there was a dog, his name was Pedro. He was a Yorkish Terrier. Everyone loved him so much, that he traveled all around the world. He has been to Africa, Europe, Asia, Australia, South America, and North America. The dog was pure white! Whiter than snow. One time he got let outside to play, Pedro got away. He came back about five weeks later, but the dog wasn't white,as you can imagine, he was brown, and grey. His owner was confused because she didn't know it was him! So, she washed him off and found out it was Pedro. But now Pedro was now __back to square one.__ Nobody loved him as much from that day(except for his owner). After that day, he was in the __dog days. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++__

__I__ understood there was a dog named Pedro and one time he ran away for 5weeks. Then he came back and his owner had to wash him off to know it was him. I like how you told that Pedro has ran across the world before. I wonder why you underlined somethings. You might want to check for capital letters. From:Taylor

__++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++__ I underlined those words because we were supposed to have two idioms. Those are my idioms. I checked for Capital letters! __++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++__

__**BACK TO SQUARE ONE**:__ to start over. __**DOG DAYS**:__ to be less happy then you were. whats going to happen: 1.)it will tell about Pedro 2.)it will tell how white Pedro was 3.)the problem will take place 4.)Owner will put up many signs 5.)Pedro will come back five weeks later
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Pedro the dog!!!!

One day, there was a dog, his name was Pedro. He was a Yorkish Terrier. Everyone loved him so much, that he traveled all around the world to see rich people. Many rich people pay to see this wonderful dog. He has been to Africa, Europe, Asia, Australia, South America, and North America. Pedro was pure white! Whiter than snow. Sometimes, when he got let out in the winter you couldn't see him. His owner had to search all over to find him. It is hard to keep a white dog white! So, Pedro would get a bath every week to stay clean. Everything on this dog was white. Even his teeth! His owner brushed his teeth everyday. Pedro wore close too. what color do you think those were?! Well, they weren't white! They were black. if they were white, you wouldn't be able to see it! One time he got let outside to play,in the rain. The only problem was that the rain was making the ground all muddy. The owner looked outside and saw a two things. They was: a tree, and a lot of mud. Pedro got away. His owner was panicking! So, his owner put up signs, and rewards. The sign said.....

this is a picture of him!(when he was clean) DOG LOST!!!

WHO: my dog Pedro WHAT: got away HOW:by getting let out side WHEN: on the date of 12/3/04 WHERE:at my house
 * please help find my dog!!!!**

REWARD:$1,000 AND DOGS AUTOGRAPH

His owner looked for weeks and weeks but couldn't find him. so he gave up. in about five weeks later he came back without him knowing !He came back about five weeks later, but the dog wasn't white,as you can imagine, he was brown, and grey. His owner was confused because she didn't know it was him! So, she washed him off and found out it was Pedro. But now Pedro was now __back to square one.__ Everyone loved him just **as much** from that day. After that day,unfortinuitly, he was in the __dog days.__ __BACK TO SQUARE ONE:__ to start over. __DOG DAYS:__ to be less happy then you were.

this is a picture of him (when he is dirty)

rootbeerMI7's opinion! my top three best revised are........... 1.)rootbeerMI7 2.)texboy 3.)weird al

meyerislandchief writes: check your spelling and grammar add more adjectives & adverbs (describing words) to really bring the story visually to life for your reader. add some dialog if possible

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final draft!!!

whats going to happen: 1.)it will tell about Pedro 2.)it will tell how white Pedro was 3.)the problem will take place 4.)Owner will put up many signs 5.)Pedro will come back five weeks later

Pedro the dog!!!!

One day, there was a very nice, caring, and popular dog. His name was **Pedro**. He was a Yorkish Terrier. Everyone loved him so much, that he traveled all around the world to see rich people, to see people that didn't have homes ,and have never seen a dog before. Many rich people pay to see this wonderful dog. He has been to Africa, Europe, Asia, Australia, South America, and North America. Pedro and his owner became very rich off this. With the spare money, Pedro's owner would get new (but expensive) things for him.Some of them would be a dog mansion, and the best of the best dog chow, and diamond collars. The money that they had left over from that they would get on food, drinks, and stuff that they NEED. Pedro was a pure white coat. Whiter than snow. Sometimes, when he got let out in the winter you couldn't see him. His owner had to search all over to find him. It is hard to keep a white dog white! So, Pedro would get a bath every week to stay clean. Everything on this dog was white. Even his teeth were white! His owner brushed his teeth everyday. Pedro wore close too. what color do you think those were?! Well, they weren't white! They were black. if they were white, you wouldn't be able to see it! One time he got let outside to play,in the rain. The only problem was that the rain was making the ground all muddy. The owner looked outside and saw a two things. They was: a tree, and a lot of mud. Pedro got away. His owner was panicking! So, his owner put up signs, and rewards. The sign said.....

this is a picture of him!(when he was clean) DOG LOST!!!

WHO: my dog Pedro WHAT: got away HOW:by getting let out side WHEN: on the date of 12/3/04 WHERE:at my house
 * please help find my dog!!!!**

REWARD:$1,000 AND DOGS AUTOGRAPH His owner looked for weeks and weeks but couldn't find him. So he gave up. in about five weeks he came back without him knowing but the dog wasn't white,as you can imagine, he was brown, and black. His owner was confused because she didn't know it was him! So, she washed him off and found out it was Pedro. It took a very long time to wash off Pedro. It took..........2 hours. But ,now, Pedro was now __back to square one.__ He had to walk around all fancy and beautiful for people to notice him and that he could get popular again. Everyone loved him just as much from that day. After that day,unfortunately, he was in the __dog days.__ So.... He had to get into shows again, and to stop being sad Pedro and be Happy Pedro. this is a picture of him (when he is dirty) //**IDIOMS:**// __**BACK TO SQUARE ONE:**__ to start over. __**DO**____**G**____**DAYS:**__ to be less happy then you were. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Comment by: Danny Sanmiguel C.M.S I heard...A dog named Pedro got lost and is now he is darker. I liked...that you put in a dog because i like dogs. I wonder about...why you made the dogs name Pedro.