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=How the pig got pink .=

Idioms sitting shotgun thats all folks every other pig wants to be pink

the paint washes off one rainy day

he is mean to everyone

god paints every pig pink except for porky

Once upon their was a pig named Porky. Porky hated his purple color, that every pig liked their purple. Porky always wanted to be pink and nothing else. He tries to tell a human, but all he heard was oink. He tries to tell the other pigs that he wants to be pink, but no pig cares.

porky starts to be very mean to every pig he sees. He goes to the lord and says ," if I was pink I would be better than you ". So the lord changes all the pigs pink accept for him. Porky said, " I do not need to be pink".

later porky learns you must always be nice to other pigs. So the lord changes Porky pink. From then on pigs were always pink.

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Sup Texboy. Here are my comments (1) I understood that Porky hated his purple color. (2) I liked how you used the words lord //a//nd pig which you used both in your story (3) Why did your main charchater start to be mean to the other pigs? - from Austin N. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Once upon their was a pig named Porky. Porky hated his purple color, that every other pig liked. Porky always wanted to be pink and nothing else. He tries to tell a human, but all he heard was oink. He tries to tell the other pigs that he wants to be pink, but no pig cares .Porky said , " they listen like a sitting shotgun ." porky starts to be very mean to every pig he sees because they would not help him become pink. He goes to the lord and says ," if I was pink I would be better than you ". So the lord changes all the pigs pink accept for him. Porky said, " I do not need to be pink". He goes on without being pink. He paints himself pink accept he bought the dark pink not the light pink. Porky was the clown of the town. Even the humans noticed.He went to a tree and cried his eyes out. He told the lord he was sorry, so the lord changes Porky pink because he took responsibility. From then on pigs were always pink. Porky is now the pig on Bugs Bunny and sometimes says thats all folks and literally thats all folks.

the chief writes: much better - let's work on grammar & punctuation what do quotes start with? work on indenting paragraphs each time another person (animal) speaks

=final draft=

Once upon a time their was a pig named Porky. Porky hated his purple color, that every other pig liked. Porky always wanted to be pink. He tries to tell a human, but all he heard as oink. He tries to tell the other pigs, but no pig cares.

Porky said ," they listen like a sitting shotgun." Porky begins to be very mean to the other pigs because they would not help him become pink. He goes to the lord ans says ," If I were pink I would be better than you ." So the lord changes all the pigs pink accept for him. Porky says " I do not need to be pink ". He goes on without being pink.

He paints himself pink accept he bought the dark pink not the light pink. Porky was the clown of the town. Even the humans noticed. Porky went to a tree and cried his eyes out. He told the lord he was sorry, so the lord changes him pink because he took responsibility for his actions. From then on pigs were always pink. Porky is now the pig on Bugs Bunny and sometimes says thats all folks and literally thats all folks.

Dear Texboy

I liked the part of he told the lord becase writings of god are good and it made me think you are a good writer and good person. Porkyshould be so happy couse he is pink.I wondered if you like pigs couse i dont.your friend Luis